Princess Prettie

Nawat bad. I like it. The first draft gave too much away, like other people said, that's all. The only grammar mistakes I could find were that you spelled "Lily" ...

Yeah... I think you got a little confused. This is a poetry section. If you want to introduce yourself, then go here: Not to mention, there are several grammatial mistakes ...

I really, really, REALLY liked that. GREAT imagery... I loved the lines "a canopy of cherry trees", and "the moon our only witness." The only thing I didn't understand was ...

My body is broken as I stand at the edge of Fallen men mountain. I don't quite understand the mountain part of this poem. If it's the name of the ...

Fantabulous. That's all I have to say. It's really heartfelt and I love your imagery... I literally can find NOTHING wrong with it. The "I'm Sorry" really stands out and ...

Pretty good, but only a story skeleton. Also, very short, and a LOT of grammar/spelling errors. You've got a good idea and plot, you just need to use a better... ...

Not bad, not bad at all, but as the other commenters said, it is really short. There are a few capitalization errors, and I'm just going to remind you to ...